So far, I'm loving this! Early on in Morris' route. The writing is great, the humor is wonderful, and there's generous use of basic animations. SUPER kudos for putting in the effort NOT to mirror sprites when it would be obvious (the store uniforms, the hearts shirt, Morris' arm, etc). I notice some characters don't have speaking sprites (like Vendrake), but this is still a very early build from the version number.
You also managed to make a flamboyantly gay character that doesn't drive me up the wall, and in fact is someone I care for, with King. (I'm bi, so it's not the sexuality of those characters that gets to me.) He's bright, confident, and affectionate without being overbearing and in-your-face. I can't wait to see how things turn out for him!
I noticed how linear it was, and coming back here I see its "mostly kinetic" so that explains things. That said, I think you might want to consider changing the narration from second person to third, since Kobu is clearly his own character, and because it's so linear. I don't feel like I'm Kobu the same way as other VN protags because of how few choices we get. So maybe make it third-person? (I know that's a LOT to rewrite, so I understand if you decide not to ^^; )
I super-appreciate that you actually have multiple body shapes available for paths--you've got the twink, the bara, and the beefcake. As a fan of softer guys, I think it's awesome that you're letting us choose like this. All three also are quite interesting. Lucien's stuck up, but clearly concerned and good at heart; Morris is surprisingly crafty for a boar (yay pigs!) and down to Earth; and Toast is adorably off the wall. As well, I've noticed that your nipples are...actually pretty tame, and that's kinda refreshing. They don't try and draw your attention, they're very simple and convey what you intend. (At least on Kobu so far, dunno how it is on the others.)
Overall, this is a lovely project, and I can't wait to see where this goes. If the story itself is already complete, as in we get an ending, I'll be VERY impressed since this is such an early build! Keep working hard, looking forward to more :)
I LOVE THIS VN SO MUCH BUT IM TO ADDICTED TO THIS I NEED NEW UPDATE 😭 BECAUSE I SUPER LOVE READING THIS IS MY HAPPINESS 💗AND I LOVE MORRIS SO MUCH AND KOBU😭❤️
I have only finished Lucien's route but its a fun visual novel. Plus I genuinely smiled when I saw some familiar thing in my life that none VN might explore. (ChickenRice )
I really got invested into visual novels recently and by far this is one the best I have seen so far even though it's incomplete also i recommend other visual novels if like romantic/lore heavy novel I recommend "Repeat"(it's nsfw so I warned you ) or the other visual novel "kibbleton University" (it's also nsfw) made by the same team that made WTDL
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So far, I'm loving this! Early on in Morris' route. The writing is great, the humor is wonderful, and there's generous use of basic animations. SUPER kudos for putting in the effort NOT to mirror sprites when it would be obvious (the store uniforms, the hearts shirt, Morris' arm, etc). I notice some characters don't have speaking sprites (like Vendrake), but this is still a very early build from the version number.
You also managed to make a flamboyantly gay character that doesn't drive me up the wall, and in fact is someone I care for, with King. (I'm bi, so it's not the sexuality of those characters that gets to me.) He's bright, confident, and affectionate without being overbearing and in-your-face. I can't wait to see how things turn out for him!
I noticed how linear it was, and coming back here I see its "mostly kinetic" so that explains things. That said, I think you might want to consider changing the narration from second person to third, since Kobu is clearly his own character, and because it's so linear. I don't feel like I'm Kobu the same way as other VN protags because of how few choices we get. So maybe make it third-person? (I know that's a LOT to rewrite, so I understand if you decide not to ^^; )
I super-appreciate that you actually have multiple body shapes available for paths--you've got the twink, the bara, and the beefcake. As a fan of softer guys, I think it's awesome that you're letting us choose like this. All three also are quite interesting. Lucien's stuck up, but clearly concerned and good at heart; Morris is surprisingly crafty for a boar (yay pigs!) and down to Earth; and Toast is adorably off the wall. As well, I've noticed that your nipples are...actually pretty tame, and that's kinda refreshing. They don't try and draw your attention, they're very simple and convey what you intend. (At least on Kobu so far, dunno how it is on the others.)
Overall, this is a lovely project, and I can't wait to see where this goes. If the story itself is already complete, as in we get an ending, I'll be VERY impressed since this is such an early build! Keep working hard, looking forward to more :)
Have you considered translating into Chinese?
Hi Lubin for a Chinese translation of the game try this:
https://twitter.com/ABLocalization/status/1770661192610328973
A translation patch by Team Aurora
Thanks!
I LOVE THIS VN SO MUCH BUT IM TO ADDICTED TO THIS I NEED NEW UPDATE 😭 BECAUSE I SUPER LOVE READING THIS IS MY HAPPINESS 💗AND I LOVE MORRIS SO MUCH AND KOBU😭❤️
Ai cara... eu tô tão ansioso pra ver mais dessa história... gosto muito do morris kkkkkk
Thanks for trying the game?. Love to see new Morris fans.
I love the story!! i feel like there is so much lore to this world and id love to hear abt it!!
Aww thank you!
I have only finished Lucien's route but its a fun visual novel. Plus I genuinely smiled when I saw some familiar thing in my life that none VN might explore. (
ChickenRice )We'll do give the other routes a try, who knows how that might change your experience.
I really got invested into visual novels recently and by far this is one the best I have seen so far even though it's incomplete also i recommend other visual novels if like romantic/lore heavy novel I recommend "Repeat"(it's nsfw so I warned you ) or the other visual novel "kibbleton University" (it's also nsfw) made by the same team that made WTDL
(Sorry if I promote another visual novel)
I wasn't found "repeat" ,u have a link or sumptin like that?
Oh! Well I think just search up shikoroi and I think you should see it
This is a wonderful visual novel you all made
Thank you Kitsune, we will keep working on it!
pretty good i liked it
Thanks! Leave us a review if ya want !